Feedback on my career coaching offer

For : executives 40+ years old who want to break into their industry of choice

Let’s reduce the stress and raise the efficiency of your job search : I’ll teach you how to catch the recruiter’s attention — even if you are not the ideal candidate for the job!

Comment :
I have trouble with explaining the market : the people / clients I know are not just changing industries; sometimes they try to go back to their former industry or go into an industry they know (eg : as a subcontractor) but haven’t worked there yet , sometimes they try to make it in a very competitive industry where any flaw is a problem… —> that’s where they are thirsty for help with getting recruiters’ attention.

Thanks in advance!