Niche drama


So I have been doing some work on my niche, I have two proposals. I really do want it to be specific and it would be great with some feedback from you:)
OK, here we go:
I help overachieving perfectionists to create more realistic personal goals and expectations.
I help women that are overachieving perfectionist to have a more balanced lifestyle

Thank you so much for your input and time.

Best Regards